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The Renaissance - Periodicals - Nashville, TN… Voicing opinions by Dan Sutherland.
The pre-choruses are doing something smart — "they say it's just a chemical" and "they say it never lasts" both introduce a little doubt/tension right before the chorus explodes, which makes the chorus hit harder by contrast. That's good instinct, for something you made deliberate.
The bridge is the strongest section you've written across all four songs. "You might leave me tomorrow and I'll be back in my sorrow / but today I'm fine, you're all mine, and I'm not letting go" — that's genuinely well-crafted; it acknowledges the fragility of the feeling without undercutting the celebration, which gives the song real emotional depth instead of just being one-note joy.
"Happiness hits like a freight train running wild through my veins" is a great opening chorus line — strong, physical, unexpected image (freight train) paired with something more internal (veins). That contrast is doing real work.
The Renaissance - Periodicals - Nashville, TN… Voicing opinions by Dan Sutherland.
This is the most complete song structurally and emotionally — nice work.
by Dan Sutherland.
The Renaissance - Periodicals - Nashville, TN… Voicing opinions by Dan Sutherland.
The pre-choruses are doing something smart — "they say it's just a chemical" and "they say it never lasts" both introduce a little doubt/tension right before the chorus explodes, which makes the chorus hit harder by contrast. That's good instinct, for something you made deliberate.
The bridge is the strongest section you've written across all four songs. "You might leave me tomorrow and I'll be back in my sorrow / but today I'm fine, you're all mine, and I'm not letting go" — that's genuinely well-crafted; it acknowledges the fragility of the feeling without undercutting the celebration, which gives the song real emotional depth instead of just being one-note joy.
"Happiness hits like a freight train running wild through my veins" is a great opening chorus line — strong, physical, unexpected image (freight train) paired with something more internal (veins). That contrast is doing real work.
The Renaissance - Periodicals - Nashville, TN… Voicing opinions by Dan Sutherland.
This is the most complete song structurally and emotionally — nice work.
by Dan Sutherland.
